[TOEFL/Writing] Question 1 : Disscusion of smart cars

My Writing

Smart cars are continuously communicating with a centered-control system and dribe themselves using a lot of sensors. However, a new technolohy always has some problems and the writer and lecturer are discussing the pros and cons of smart cars.

First, the writer argued that smart cars can prevent accidents with a lot of sensors. These sensors can measure most things: distance between cars and obstacles. Moreover, the system built in the car can calculate whole things and automatically control braking and handling to avoid accidents. However, the lecturer argued that smart cars still have accidents, and they could make more accidents if the distance of cars narrows with faster speeds.

Second, the writer said smart cars can make traffic jams disappear and people can increase the highway speed of smart cars. On the other hand, the lecturer said more people will be on the highway because driving is much easier than before. For this reason, people could buy more cars and it could create more traffic problems.

Lastly, the writer said people can reduce the costs of driving because smart cars are programmed to find the most direct routes. The lecturer asserted that smart cars cannot reduce the costs of driving. The costs of driving are dependent on the distance people want to go and repairs is much more expensive than others cars.

 

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